The giants garden
We were beginning to regret venturing into the giant's garden this morning. Me and my sister looked into the giant sized lamp beside the street, the light almost blinding us. The dark clouds filled the blue sky. We were like little dolls compered to the giant city.
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The little family griped onto the green plants. They were in the giant's fresh green garden, the light shimmered off the wet plants. Squinting, we could see the humongous giant. His eyes were bulging, he was as red as a tomato.
Hi Salamasina. Another good piece of writing. Thank you for sharing. You have added in a variety of wow words to describe the giant and used a verb (ing) to start a sentence. I have used you writing and edited to add in some different sentence starters. Take a look and think about this when starting your next writing. Gripping onto the stolen green plants, the little family peered up nervously at the dark shadow looming in front of them. They were in the giant's fresh green garden, the light shimmered off the wet plants around them making them easy to spot. Squinting, we could see the humongous giant. His eyes were bulging and he was as red as a tomato.
ReplyDeleteHello Miss Green, thank you. I will take it in mind
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